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Some people belive that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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Nowadays rising individuals which is they have free
time
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 why some
people
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 say that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community
work
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 in their leisure
time
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This
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 can be good side youth and the community as well . I think every young take part in different residents in their free
time
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 . I completely agree with
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 side , but some youth do not ready to
work
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 somewhere yet .
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 with , if the youth
work
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 on clean paths in their society or awareness
people
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 about clean sill post success on all sides of the
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 , the public must form a group of teenagers to clean the ways back benefits for them for illustrating the can allocate every group for specific thing from all the sides whether cleaning or awareness
people
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 , education sector and some like that .
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 , they must not force them to do it . Because of the fact that there is a situation that puts us against our law . If
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 condition affected children in the teaching system . Even so , it is even a way to force it .
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 , on the other hand, there are a lot of minors without
work
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 in recent days , so it does not matter
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 they do some employment in their spare
time
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 . First of all , if a juvenile were unemployed , he can do some deed for his
association
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instead
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 of staying without any
work
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 , when he will contribute to the expansion of the country and progress for the better .
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 , at present online games and computer games are the most developed in the world . If
people
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 went to the
association
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 than playing games . I believe that
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 way is true .
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 , the post-accomplishment and unemployment limit are the two characteristics of volunteering struggle for an
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 by juveniles.
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 , we must not specify juveniles for donation
work
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 . It forces all humans into different types .
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