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Some people think that we should divide students based on their academic ability, while others think we should educate all students together. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Academic capacity is highly valued by educational institutions since it could provoke profound influences
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 young individuals regarding their future careers. Despite some perspectives suggesting that schools should group
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 based on their performances in academic subjects, I am personally in favour of coeducation, since it provides a better study environment.
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 in the same classes could enhance the efficiency of the acquisition of knowledge since educators don't have to slow down the lecture for a few individuals who have a hard time catching up. Take private high schools in Taiwan as an example, which are accustomed to dividing
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 based on their study performances, and varying their teaching materials to ensure all
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 are able to make progress in their studies.
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, I believe mixing
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 with different study levels could foster more advantages
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 since it allows young individuals to reverse situations since all
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 use the same teaching resources.
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, it will demolish the prejudices regarding those with bad scores, since others are able to see their talents
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 they studying together.
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, those who are not good at science may have a talent for learning languages, it could provide a good environment for
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 to help their peers to make progress in different areas. To summarise, it is true that young people with similar learning abilities could enhance the efficiency of teaching and have a better chance to outshine others with their academic performance.
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, in my perspective, descendants who have various academic abilities learning together could foster more positive effects in the long term.
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