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In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, it has become a trend amongst people who choose international destinations over domestic ones to plan a vacation. I presume that Inclination towards foreign travel will be exponentially increased in the future.
However
, it would affect human beings’ choices to travel within the country. I disagree with the statement and
this
 essay will speak about the points with relevant instances.
Firstly
, Individuals Nowadays have become more evolved in terms of picking up the right travelling destination than the ones in the past.
Moreover
, they prefer locations which would offer them a lifetime experience.
For instance
, their preference for picking a locality begins with beautiful scenery, the weather of their choice whether it is cold or hot, and most importantly the Beach person prefers hot summer conditions. Meanwhile, the person who prefers cold climates prefers Mountains.
In Addition
,
Due to
 less availability of preferred ,
sites
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 many humans tend to take a break and visit different parts of the world. They tend to get bored going to the same location in their home nation now and
then
, so they favour moving outside of their territory. To cite an example, the weather in Canada tends to be extremely cold for eight months in length which lets humans move outside and visit rather hotter Nations
such
 as Jamaica or South Africa to find an escape and experience a new destination altogether. In Conclusion, for better exposure and a suitable ,environment humans will be opting an overseas locality.
Moreover
, limited whereabouts in people's homeland would push them to visit abroad.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • domestic tourism
  • international travel
  • cultural exchange
  • national pride
  • affordability
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