Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In the modern world, in some societies people
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about
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permission to children in
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life. The reason why,
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it is the effect of individualism, who care only about themselves.
However
, others suppose, it is necessary to allow teenagers to make
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decisions.
This
essay totally
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with
this
statement. First of all, It is
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principle that every person in every country has
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their own
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life,
choices
and future.
Moreover
, making decisions from young
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assist to raise
child
more confident and happier.
For instance
,
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researcher
researchers
investigate
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which prove that in
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adulthood individuals are more responsible and kinder than their peers
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if they make a lot of
choices
in childhood. On
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top of that,
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of individuals who make
choices
have
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and
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selfish.
Finally
,
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make a lot of
donatations
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donations
and help to charities organizations.
On the other hand
, some individuals believe that
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parents should
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and solve all
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their child
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child
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problems.
In addition
to it, parents should punish their teenagers or control
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.
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, in most cases, old people strongly believe in that way. Second of all,
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generation had
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of thinking, which can not use in nowadays. In conclusion, in most parts
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the world, parents have
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to make
choices
for their children,
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and decide
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what
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little
man
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men
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should wear, eat, or study. It may affect a negative impact
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the
child
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future. In my opinion,
child
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children
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have
own
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their own
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opinion
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, which can not be ignored by adults.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomy
  • Consequence-awareness
  • Self-centered
  • Informal decision-making education
  • Child development
  • Age-appropriate choices
  • Cognitive growth
  • Fostering independence
  • Parental guidance
  • Societal norms
  • Interpersonal consideration
  • Balance of freedom
  • Individualism versus collectivism
  • Experience-based learning
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