Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
In the modern world, in some societies people
concerned
about Add a missing verb
are concerned
to give
permission to children in Change the verb form
giving
every day
life. The reason why, Replace the word
everyday
because
it is the effect of individualism, who care only about themselves. Add a missing verb
is because
However
, others suppose, it is necessary to allow teenagers to make own
decisions. Correct pronoun usage
their own
This
essay totally disagree
with Change the verb form
disagrees
this
statement.
First of all, It is fundamental
principle that every person in every country has Add an article
a fundamental
the fundamental
own
life, Correct pronoun usage
their own
his own
her own
choices
and future. Moreover
, making decisions from young ages
assist to raise Fix the agreement mistake
age
child
more confident and happier. For instance
, reseacher
investigate Correct your spelling
researcher
researchers
association
which prove that in Fix the agreement mistake
associations
the
adulthood individuals are more responsible and kinder than their peersCorrect article usage
apply
,
if they make a lot of Remove the comma
apply
choices
in childhood. On the
top of that, Correct article usage
apply
society
of individuals who make Correct article usage
a society
choices
have conscience
and Add an article
a conscience
not
selfish. Add a missing verb
are not
Finally
, youngers
make a lot of Correct your spelling
younger
donatations
and help to charities organizations.
Correct your spelling
donations
On the other hand
, some individuals believe that,
parents should Remove the comma
apply
decided
and solve all Change the verb form
decide
Correct pronoun usage
their child
child
problems. Change noun form
child's
In addition
to it, parents should punish their teenagers or control freedom
. Correct pronoun usage
their freedom
For example
, in most cases, old people strongly believe in that way. Second of all, old
generation had Correct article usage
the old
other type
of thinking, which can not use in nowadays.
In conclusion, in most parts Change the wording
another type
other types
in
the world, parents have Change preposition
of
power
to make Change the article
the power
choices
for their children, decide
what Correct word choice
and decide
liitle
Correct your spelling
little
man
should wear, eat, or study. It may affect a negative impact Fix the agreement mistake
men
in
the Change preposition
on
child
future. In my opinion, Change noun form
child's
child
have Fix the agreement mistake
children
own
Correct pronoun usage
their own
opinion
, which can not be ignored by adults.Fix the agreement mistake
opinions
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