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Band 4

The system used for rubbish/ garbage collection in your local area is not working properly. This is causing problems for you and your neighbours. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter - describe how the rubbish collection system is not working properly - explain how this is affecting you and you neighbours - suggest what should be done about the problem Write at least 150 words You do NOT need to write any addresses Begin your letter as follows Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir, I am writing to express my displeasure with
garbage
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 collectors. My first problem is the
garbage
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 collectors don't work at all our streets are full of
garbage
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 and the air is dirty it would be nice if they
come
Wrong verb form
came

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb come. Consider changing it.

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 at least twice a week.
Also
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, if there is a lot of waste, the air will
be pollutes
Change the verb form
be polluted

It appears that the form of the verb pollutes does not work with be in this sentence.

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 and the health of the population will lost.
In addition
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, it leads to the increase of all kinds
bad
Change preposition
of bad

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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 insects, which later
has
Correct subject-verb agreement
have

It seems that the verb has does not agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

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 bad consequences We will appeal to the government with our blood
neighbor
Change the spelling
neighbour

The spelling of neighbor is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.

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 to
sent
Wrong verb form
send

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb sent. Consider changing it.

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 us
garbage
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 collectors and we will pay them and send additional referral workers
please
Add a comma
, please

When used at the end of a sentence, the adverb please is usually preceded by a comma. Consider adding one.

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 to resolve the problem I would appreciate it if you could Yours Faithfully Toshmatov Afrosiyob

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coherence cohesion
Try to ensure your ideas are clearly structured and flow logically from one paragraph to the next. This will help make your letter more cohesive and easier to follow.
task achievement
Include more specific details about the problems you and your neighbors are facing and how they affect your daily life. This will help strengthen your argument and make your case more compelling.
task achievement
Your letter's tone is somewhat informal and abrupt in places. Remember to maintain a polite and respectful tone throughout, even when expressing frustration or dissatisfaction.
content
You've clearly communicated the main problem regarding the garbage collection issue in your local area.
proposal
You managed to propose a solution to the problem, which is an important element of the task.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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