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.People continue to recommit crimes even after being penalized for their wrongdoings. Why do you think this happens? How can crime be stopped?

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There are controversial statements heating debate over the continued reoffending of crimes after being back in society.
This
 essay is devoted to the underlying roots and followed by some equivalent resolutions. Without a shadow of a doubt, there are abundant reasons related to
this
 phenomenon. The biggest reason which causes
this
 incident is the unconsciousness of
law breakers
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lawbreakers
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. In
habitat
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their habitat
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, there are many humans not aware of their
behavior
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behaviour
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 so they continuously repeat their illegal actions.
For example
, Viet Nam has a wealth of young adult positions set up for unlawful racing without realizing it can cause fatalities for themself and strangers.
While
 the reasons
of
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commiting
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committing
 convicts are widely acknowledged, there are some ways to stop offenders. Because the cognitive ability of juveniles is
shortaged
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shortage
shortages
, it is vital for family and school to combine in order to raise awareness of them.
For instance
,
while
 parents should take care of their
childrend
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children
, the place where children go to be educated is necessary to open more legitimate education sessions with a view to detecting the importance and penalty of wicked acts. In conclusion, the relapse of wrong-doers has a bunch of reasons.
Hence
, there need to be solutions equivalent to solving
this
 problem.
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