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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Othe Discuss both these views and give your own opinionrs, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools.

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Nowadays, it has become very common to educate children in co-educational institutes
while
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 some people think it is better to educate boys and girls in separate
schools
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. In
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 paragraphs, we will discuss both perspectives and I will give my opinion on why it is more beneficial to attend mixed
schools
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society believes that the notion of single-sex
schools
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 is good as they don’t get distracted and do well in
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their studies
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. To illustrate, those people think that teenagers don’t worry about
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fashion, make-up or looks when they are studying in single-sex
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.
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, they gain more confidence and perform well when there are no
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 distractions.
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, girls get
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 to study subjects like science which were considered
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“boys’ subjects” without any stereotypes.
On the other hand
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, many parents want their child to study in
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a co-educational
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 environment because
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 helps their child to grow academically
as well as
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 socially.
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, a survey suggests that pupils who attend co-educational
schools
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 tend to have better communication skills than
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 study in single-sex institutions as they lack
opposite sex
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opposite-sex
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 interaction during their early days of life.
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,
schools
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 are the platform where
child
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the child
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 is prepared for actual life but if he doesn’t get the same environment as
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the actual
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 world
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 school doesn’t serve its purpose.
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, I would argue
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the fact that some people think it is better to educate boys and girls in separate
schools
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.
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, parents should ensure that their kid
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co-educational
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a co-educational
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 school and doesn’t lack the social skill which he will need to do well in life.
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