below gives us some informations about the average rates of spending on different items in five different countries

The table below gives us some
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about the average rates of spending on different items in five different
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in 2002. It can
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that turkish
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turkish
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people
had
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rate of expenditure among
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countries
in using food and drinking
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tobacco
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irish
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people
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second grade in
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category . The
others
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almost had the same level.
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matter in
turkey
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dramatically
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increased , spending on clothing and
footwearing
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footwear
nearly had the same
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the
others
. A bout using clothes
italianpeople
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Italian people
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. The grade about clothes shows the popularity of dressing among
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people
in2002, About
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of education and leisure ,we again see
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people
outruned
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others
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and they had the most consumption .
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spain
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had the
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least
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rate of using
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about
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spending on different items so its rates of consumption had no prominent gap
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the
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consumers ‘
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