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Introduction
The table below gives us some
informations
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 about the average rates of spending on different items in five different
countries
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 in 2002.
Body paragraph 1
It can
seen
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that turkish
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turkish
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Turkish
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people
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 had
most
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a most
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 rate of expenditure among
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others
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countries
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 in using food and drinking
also
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 tobacco
afterward
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irish
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Irish
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people
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 had
the
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second grade in
this
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 category .
Body paragraph 2
The
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others
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other
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countries
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 almost had the same level.
Body paragraph 3
Nonetheless
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, spending on
above
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the above
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 matter in
turkey
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Turkey
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 dramatically
had
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increased , spending on clothing and
footwearing
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footwear
nearly had the same
opration
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operation
with
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the
others
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. A bout using clothes
italianpeople
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Italian people
 took an advantage the
others
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. The grade about clothes shows the popularity of dressing among
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Italian's
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italian’s
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Italian’s
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people
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 in2002,
Body paragraph 4
About
topic
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 of education and leisure ,we again see
turkish
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people
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outruned
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outran
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others
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other
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countries
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 and they had the most consumption .
Body paragraph 5
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Instead
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spain
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Spain
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 had the
atleast
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least
at least
 rate of using
this
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Conclusion
Sweden had the most balance
about
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in
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 spending on different items so its rates of consumption had no prominent gap
than
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to
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 the
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others
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other
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 consumers ‘
country
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countries
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.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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