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Many today feel that attention spans are becoming shorter due to the prevalence of social media. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The use of social
media
 is rapidly increasing nowadays. Certainly, there are many different
effects
 on us. The most discussed
effects
 are attention spans. In my opinion,
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social
media
 has its benefits but we should be careful about
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 spans
also
attentions
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 deficit.
Firstly
, the benefits of
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social
media
 can not be ignored. Especially about communication with people who live
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long distances.
For
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 the social
media
 applications
such
 as Facebook, Instagram and Twitter provided
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 connection between people in the pandemic.
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social
media
 is developed a lot of
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 opportunities, so
busines
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business
 lines are created. The most common sample is The Metaverse.
The social
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media
 is a part of our lives now, we must accept
this
, but we must learn what is the bad
effects
.
Furthermore
, one of the most known bad
effects
 is
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 decrease in attention spans. The
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 the reduced attention spans is very quickly switching between screens. Sometimes we decide to change the screens but the worst thing is the application decides it.
For example
 Instagram Reels or the
aplication
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application
 of TikTok. In there, the flow is too fast, and maybe
that is
 created the
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about
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 fast flowing. Even though
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real life does not continue
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 that speed. We should
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 the
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 and we must protect ourselves and our children from the bad
effects
 of social
media
. In conclusion, I believe that
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social
media
 will take up more
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 in our lives, And we can never avoid that. So we should keep
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 with
socail
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social
media
 but we have to realize what is good or bad about it.
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