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In the past ,most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays , most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community.

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There were many advantages of living in a
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, had some drawbacks as well.
People
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 in the
village
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 cared about each other very well because they spent so much time together that they even became one family and one villager's problem was the problem of the
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.
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, most villages were located far from
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 and
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 pollution was significantly less and
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 of the
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 could breathe its fresh and pure air.
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, in the past villages were the perfect places for raising a child or living as an old person because of their low crime rate.
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, there were some disadvantages of villages to take into account. One of which was the lack of job opportunities as there were very few
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 who could offer a job. Almost all men worked as a farmer and nearly all women were housekeepers.
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 lost access to a lot of amenities
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 as hospitals and emergency rooms. If an emergency aroused they had to drive for long distances and it only made the emergency worse.
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, living in urban areas has benefits
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 as access to a wide range of jobs and careers.
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,
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 have many ways to entertain
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.
People
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 can meet new
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, do sports, strike up a relationship, go to the theatre or just stay in and watch movies.
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 provide reliable public transport and better standards of living.
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, because of the inequality of
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 and arrogance may prevent
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 from knowing each other. In conclusion,
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 life could offer fresh air and a strong bond between villagers but it
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 has limited job opportunities.
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,
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 may help you to have a good time,
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, they can make
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 careless about others.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sense of community
  • Bond
  • Close-knit
  • Tight-knit
  • Belonging
  • Familiarity
  • Security
  • Support system
  • Social connections
  • Look out for
  • Have someone's back
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