The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port City from 2003 to 2012.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port City from 2003 to 2012.
The given graph charts illustrate information about the changing
rates
of
crime
in three different
areas
; Burglary, car theft and Robbery during 9 years (2003 to 2012), in New Port City Center.
Overall
, the highest
rates
of
crime
happened in Burgalry from 2004 to 2005 with
the
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proportion of almost 4000, followed by car theft in second place with a
number
of
incidents
of almost 3000.
In contrast
, the lowest rate of
crime
was Robbery under 1000
incidents
in 2005.
In addition
, during 9 years the
number
of
incidents
from that three
areas
were
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decreased and only depicts
the
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slight increase in some years. The rate of
crime
in Burglary was highest from 2003 to 2004 , more than 3500
incidents
happened during that year.
In contrast
from 2004 to ,2008 the
number
of
crime
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in these
areas
reduced to 1200
incidents
.
Furthermore
, the
rates
of
incidents
slightly increase in the next year until 2012. The
number
of crimes from car theft
areas
shows different trends. It was highest from 2003 to 2004, with almost 3000
incidents
.
However
, fell
down
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to 2000
incidents
in 2006 and slightly increased from 2007 to 2008.
In contrast
, rose again from 2009 to 2012. The lowest
number
of crimes happened in the Robbery area. The highest
rates
of
crime
happened from 2003 to 2005 (under 1000
incidents
). In the next year, the
number
of
incidents
in
this
area is still under 1000
incidents
(2006 to 202012).
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
Vocabulary: Replace the words rates, crime, areas, number, incidents with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.

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