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In many countries, some people earn very high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country. Others believe that the government should not allow people to earn salaries above a certain level. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#countries #people #salaries #country #government #level
Income is
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 source of living for every human being on
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 planet
wheather
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whether
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 through
a
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agriculture,
job
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 or
a
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business. In most communities, a large number of workers makes
large
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 amount of money.Some
people
 believe there should be
restriction
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 on earning at some level
whereas
 others
supports
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current
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 law of earning without any interference by authorities. In
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 paragraphs, I will discuss both views and will give my opinion on
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.
Firstly
, any type of involvement by governer authorities
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 making money would discourage employees to
work
. Because of
this
, there could be a shortage of labour in
country
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the country
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 which will directly
effects
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 the economy.
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- a large number of staff do not give extra hours to
work
 just because of the high amount of tax deductions on their overtime pay in Canada. So, restrictions on income
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 clearly a demotivation for employees.
Secondly
, if government do not let
people
 earn after
certain
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 level, there would be no urge in youth to study hard and get
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high paying
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 jobs
such
 as doctors and engineers.
This
 could make
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 economic crisis in any country. On
other
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 hand,
restriction
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restrictions
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 on earning salaries can be beneficial for some nations especially where unemployment is a major concern. It creates
a more positions
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a more position
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 in companies which means more job opportunities which
brings
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 out
the
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 large number of
people
 from the
grisp
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grasp
grips
grip
 of poverty. I strongly believe
this
 will be
very
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 smart move to eliminate
shortage
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the shortage
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 of
work
. In conclusion, the involvement of governer body
on
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 making money makes
people
 unwilling to
work
 and they do not bother themselves to accomplish goals.
However
,
this
 step can be proven a historic change in developing countries.
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