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The chart below show the changes that took place in three areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003 to 2012.

The chart below show the changes that took place in three areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003 to 2012.
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The given line chart depicts the changing rates of
crime
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 taking in burglary, car theft, and
robbery
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 in the inner
city
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, of New Port, between 2003 and 2012.
Overall
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, the number of crimes in both car theft and
robbery
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 fluctuated during the period; meanwhile,
the
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burglary
crime
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 tended to decrease.
According to
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 the data, the
crime
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 of
robbery
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 fluctuated from over 500 in 2003 to about 800 in 2012 and reached a peak at almost 1000 in 2005;
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, it was the least type of
crime
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 happening in the
city
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 centre compared to the others during the period.
On the other hand
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, the number of burglary crimes was the highest during three years, about under 3500 in 2003 and peaked at 3800 in 2004.
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, from 2004 to 2012, it fell significantly from 3800 to under 1500 respectively.
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, it was the second position of
crime
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 in the
city
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 after
robbery
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.
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, the rate of car theft in the
city
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 centre decreased from 2800 in 2003 to over 2000 in 2006, but it rose again in the next years to approximately 2800 in 2012.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, robbery, city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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