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Many people said that coaching is not a necessary technique for them. What is your opinion and standing about this condition?

#people #technique #condition
Training makes an individual polished and
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 a major skill in being a professional. It is often argued by most of the individuals
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 not like to be trained by any of the
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 and they think it is not important for them. My opinion is substantiated in the below paragraphs.
A new
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 talent is accomplished when a person shows passion
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 it and
also
 there is a need to have a coach to upgrade the skill in every manner. People may think that they can overcome the competition with practice on a daily basis.
However
,
this
 makes them even more perfect but only
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 their own perspective itself. They somehow manage to do it and many times it is a matter of one or two steps behind, that they cannot win the respective sport.
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being said
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,
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 they lack
in
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the experience which can be tackled with a coach.
Thus
, many members participating left behind are shown to be defective in training. In my view
overall
, there is a good result when we get monitored
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 to time
according to
 the latest competitors which are well analysed by a mentor. They pick up our weaknesses and make us not
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repeat
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with
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which
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 we are missing our goal.
Consequently
,
this
 remarkably makes us
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step ahead towards our desire to win.
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, in a study conducted on participants in a sport on a national level, the players who have been mentored compared with those with self-skilled made up to the winning point and achieved their success.
Hence
, it is a compulsion
according to
 me to make the populace trim in their skills and their drawbacks have to be shown so that they can overcome to get good results.
To conclude
, it is a debatable issue and to make things clear practice makes
man
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 perfect under a good mentor.
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