It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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As an introduction, it is
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beneficial thing to take chances during
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today
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life. In my opinion, if we want to achieve a goal in life, we have to take a risk. So, it is
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in many ways. There will be no gain without trying. In the beginning, everyone has a dream to succeed in what they do.
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, if someone wants to become
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in their career, they should work hard to realize their goal,
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even if
it causes so many things to sacrifice in their normal lives.
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, it costs
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entire youth of medical students to become a good doctor.
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, it takes about seven to eight years of hard
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to be a medical specialist, but most
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Sri Lankan doctors are willing to take that risk,
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even though
they are at risk of losing
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of
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their professional
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and
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personal
lives.
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Sri Lanka is a better place with a good healthcare system.
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, if
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people are going to take chances, it can cause unnecessary stress. When
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people are determined to achieve something, they can end up in severe depression, and eventually in family conflicts. As an example, there is an
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increase
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percentage
of depression among postgraduate trainees compared to the general population.
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,
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problem can be minimized by improving the balance of lives and by arranging mind-relaxing programmes. In conclusion, taking risks is an important thing not only in
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feild
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field
but
also
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in
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the personel
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personel
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personal
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believe
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that in
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situation, the advantages are outweighing the disadvantages because the beneficial effects will lead to a better country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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