many people no longer read newspapers or watch tv programmes . instead they get news about the world from the internet . is this a positive or negative developments.

There is no denying fact that the phenomena of most of the masses in
this
modern world do not spend
time
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reading
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or
wathing
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watching
tv
news
programmes .
However
, they get national or international
news
from
internet
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the internet
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via social media
such
as
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,
facebook
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etc. It is ubiquitous across the globe
due to
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to
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number of merits .
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some of the
people
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its demerits first . In my
further
paragraphs ,
advantages
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and disadvantages of the same will be discussed. Initiating with the benefits of the same , the first and foremost key benefits is that
people
are most interested to get
news
from
internet
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as compared to obtaining
news
from
internet
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as compared to obtaining newspaper or
news
television
programmmes
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programmes
.
Mostly
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people
get
news
from social media apart from that they can learn
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skills .
Secondly
, In
this
modern world many
people
have
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sehedule
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schedule
schedules
they spend major of their
time
in their offices . so , they are unable to spend
time
on
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reading
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the newspaper
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or watching television
news
programmes but they get
news
from
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different
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of social media via
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internet
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during their travelling or
when ever
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whenever
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they get free.
Moreover
, on its darker side , some of the drawbacks which
makes
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it problematic are first ,
people
are
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,
they
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spends
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most of their
time
on
the
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mobile phones which
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causes
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of eyesights
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eyesights
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and other health issues .
Last
but not least ,
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people
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major
time
on their mobile phones .they don't
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their
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quality
time
with family and friends. In conclusion to the above statements neither its pros can be
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neglected
nor its cons . It is
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bag of positive and negative . In my
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should not be
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underestimated
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.
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