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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is the importance of freedom in society.Now people are beginning to realize that where there is no freedom there is no justice.

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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is the importance of
freedom
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 in
society
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.Now
people
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 are beginning to realize that where there is no
freedom
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 there is no justice. Personally,I tend to think that
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freedom
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 of
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 affects on
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 of
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.
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,it is well known that everyone who lives has can to speak own opinions. Without
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 it will cause
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something bad.What I mean here is that every
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 and
views
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 of
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other
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 to change something that may give benefits to modify their future. One of the main reasons behind
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that is
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 being addicted to someone or something.
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,in any voting
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,a person loses his personal view and becomes dependent on another.
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,it can
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 should be given the right of feeling that they have
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society
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 because they have their voice.
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,
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 to the benefits that
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 brings about, there are some bad effects.If
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people
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 are allowed all
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 things, they can spread untrue things or exaggerate everything
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;
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, we could not recognize what
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 true and what
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 false because there
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 a lot of information available by a lot of
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 In conclusion, I think
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 of
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 should always be attached to every time and the way we think or say will affect our
society
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 considerably. Despite some
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 effects,
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 of
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 is still essential in
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society
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