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Some people say that to prevent illness and disease, governments sshould focus more on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #illness #disease #governments #sshould #focus #pollution
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Nowadays, in order to avoid illness and disease it's necessary to introduce rules and policies to prevent
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 environmental
pollution
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 housing issues. I strongly agree with
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 viewpoint and
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 essay will discuss my viewpoint in detail and reach a conclusion.                                                                                                 In today's fast-paced world, there have been increased
problems
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 with environmental
pollution
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 all over the world.
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 the running technology advancements, many
people
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 do want to utilize the latest products and services which costs arm and leg. In that case, many
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 purchase vehicles and there is a cause enhanced heavy traffic congestion.
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, the is
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 huge damage to the environment
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 the public.
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, several
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 as asthma, hearing
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, and damage from the smoke had been occurring.
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,
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pollution
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 can be threatening to all human beings
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 negative influence on the environment as well .                                                                              
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, there are several housing
problems
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 that can be straightforwardly identified these days. Or even the forests are destroyed by the
people
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.
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 will have a negative impact on nature. Plus,
people
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 are using it for their own purpose to destroy natural attractive places. In conclusion, the government should launch taxes and regulations to avoid environmental
pollution
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 and housing
problems
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. If
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 could be done properly, it will be beneficial to avoid
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 illness and disease.
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