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Some people suggest that bringing up children by the whole Family, includine uncles, aunts, and grand parents, is better than only parents. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some believe that Upbringing offspring in a whole family is a better way than raising them by
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. I discuss both views, and
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 after ,that I will give my opinion. The first reason in my opinion is that today, because of fast-paced life and financial situation,
parents
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 should work hard together to handle their lives so they find less time during the week to spend with
children
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 so their offspring will stay alone for several hours every day,
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 is better than their relatives like grandparents, aunts or uncles pick them up and spend time with each other. They could go outside, talk with each other and after all that social and communicational skills will improve for them too. Well, another opposing opinion, I believe that when
children
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 are raised by different people even though they are relatives, they will be got different upbringing methods, so could not be raised in one specific clear appropriate way. And I think
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 is terrible for
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 because they don’t know that in one situation, what behaviour
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 or grandparents will show to them. Or I think no one better than
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 can take care of their own scion. There are lots of dangers that little
children
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 are facing with them, so will all these profound reasons, It’s better for offspring to bring up by their
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 and spend some time during the week with their relatives.
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, considering the points discussed above, the most rational conclusion to be drawn is that interacting with the whole family benefits both
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 and
children
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.
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