The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
The given diagram illustrates the process by which
sugar
is produced. There are seven steps in the process, from growing Use synonyms
sugar
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cane
to drying and cooling Use synonyms
sugar
in the container.
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The first step is
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sugar
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cane
is grown in an especial period of time about 12 to 18 months. The next stage is thatUse synonyms
,
it's picked either by the farmer or by an automatic vehicle. After that, Remove the comma
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sugar
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cane
is crushed because of high pressure from a mechanical machine which produced Use synonyms
juice
from Use synonyms
sugar
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cane
. In the fourth stage, Use synonyms
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juice
is purified by a limestone filter, which means that Add an article
the juice
sugar
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cane
became a liquid Use synonyms
after
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part.
The fifth step is evaporation, in Linking Words
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process, the Linking Words
juice
is heated in a container. Use synonyms
then
, after a Linking Words
while
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juice
became syrup. Use synonyms
after
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this
point, Linking Words
sugar
crystals are separated from the syrup by turning the ventilator which name is the centrifuge and Use synonyms
finally
, put into the calendar until the hole of them became dry and cooling.Linking Words
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