You use the local swimming pool often, and during one of your visits, you have encountered a problem. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter describe what the problem was tell what the swimming pool staff have done about it suggest your own solution to the problem.

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I am writing to you to express my dissatisfaction with the state of swimming pools.I have been a member of your club for more than 5 years and I always had a good experience.

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week I wanted to use the pool around 9pm and as soon as I got in the water I felt something touching my foot and figured out there was a piece of plastic object. Fortunately, I did not get injured. I believe staff checks the pool on a daily basis and seems like it may not be enough. People trust you with their life and letting

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kind of objects in water can have negative consequences later.There should be more strict regulations applied on the use of pools. Members should leave all their stuff in lockers and get fined when they do not follow the rules. I hope my concern will be taken into consideration to achieve higher customer satisfaction and prevent any issues which may endanger human life and health. Best regards, Laman

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Coherence and Cohesion

Ensure the letter opens with a clear indication of the topic or problem.

Coherence and Cohesion

Include paragraphs that each focus on a single idea for better clarity.

Task Achievement

The letter successfully addresses the prompt by describing the problem, actions taken, and suggesting a solution.

Task Achievement

The letter maintains a formal and suitable tone throughout.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

169 words

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The Greeting

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