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Technology is becoming progressively universal.In the full time, classroom teachers will be totally substituted for technology.Do you agree or disagree?

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Education is the best legacy and it is a means of acquiring knowledge
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 technology is the application of scientific knowledge into practice in order to gain new knowledge.I strongly disagree with the notion that classroom teachers will be faced out completely as technology advances with time because they play crucial roles in learning and the personality and experience exhibited by them are immeasurable. Logically, professional teachers play crucial roles in learning as they appear physically which creates a
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 longing and positive influence on students.The interactions shared during
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 period cannot be overemphasized.
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 a technological-driven device may perform educative roles but cannot be replaced by the efforts exhibited by tutors.The place of a tutor cannot be substituted as I remembered some years back
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 I was running a distance learning program,I would have interacted well with my lecturer if it were to be a physical class but there were only limited days to assess him physically which happens barely two weeks to my exam and it's always a revision class
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 consequentially affect me in some difficult courses.
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,the personality and experience a teacher possesses
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 to empathy and concern is unquantifiable contrary to the electrically operated device that educates students.The massive development in virtual classes has a resultant effect on the interpersonal relationship which ought to have existed among colleges and coursemates.When trainers appear in classes, students are kept under check as the vibes exhibited during each session by the professional are always exhilarating. Conclusively,the performance and activities implemented by qualified tutors cannot be substituted despite the progressive development in technology universally.
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