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Smoking should be banned in all public places even though it would restrict some of other people’s freedoms. Do you agree or disagree?  Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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It is argued that smoking in public
places
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 should be prohibited as it can constrain the freedom of other
individuals
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. In my opinion, smoking should be banned in civic
places
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 as it can lead to irreversible diseases and significantly increase the
number
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 of smoking
individuals
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.
First,
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cigarette fumes contain a
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 of toxic chemicals. When inhaled by the lungs, these substances can enter the blood system and affect the health of many organs. One of the most harmful outcomes of passive smoking is cancer.
This
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 makes being exposed to tobacco smoke as dangerous as active smoking.
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according to
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 research carried out by World Health Organisation, 3% of cancer diseases were caused by passive smoking.
Second,
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most non-smoking people do not enjoy the smell of burnt tobacco.
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, smoking in public
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 restrict the freedom of those who do not smoke, leading to a decrease in life quality. Apart from that, inhalation of smoke raises the probability of smoking addiction, which in turn significantly increases the
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 of smoking
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.
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according to
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 recent studies from the American Lung Association, 40% of people start smoking
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 passive exposure. In conclusion, passive smoking greatly decreases the health of the human population and restricts rights of the non-smoking
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. In my opinion, governments should set laws to restrict it. Nowadays, many countries already have policies regarding smoking in public
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 and I hope that in the future the
number
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 of smoke-free
places
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 will increase.
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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • secondhand smoke
  • respiratory conditions
  • smoking bans
  • individual freedom
  • social responsibility
  • public policies
  • smoke-free policies
  • healthcare costs
  • ethical considerations
  • healthy environment
  • public places
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