Young people are often influenced in their behaviours and situations by others in the same age. This is called peer pressure. Do the disadvantages of this issue outweigh advanages of it.

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young minds, who are
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people
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patterns and start reproducing them. The majority of older individuals have a lot of life experience and it is crucial to pass
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a recent research conducted by the Family Analytics Association reports, that 65% of young
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an example in their families.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • substance abuse
  • compelled
  • declining academic performance
  • sense of belonging
  • connectedness
  • emotional and social development
  • comfort zones
  • personal growth
  • lifestyle changes
  • community service
  • conform
  • peer group norms
  • suppress
  • individual identity
  • creativity
  • mental health issues
  • anxiety
  • depression
  • self-esteem
  • approval
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