The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished.The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit,during the samw two periods.
The provided table displays the amounts of tourists who visited Ashdown
Museum
during the year before and the period after it was reconstructed and the pair of pie graphs illustrate the consequence of the surveys about their satisfaction with their visit , during both years of time.
Overall
, it can be seen that there was a significant increase in the number of visitors
to a museum
after redevelopment and visitor satisfaction was the least before rebuilding it, but after ,refurbishment the ratio increased considerably.
Before the refurbishment, around 74,000 visitors
visited Ashdown Museum
and also
satisfaction rate was also
low, where half of the visitors
were not satisfied with the old museum
, where around 40 percent
of tourists were dissatisfied and 10% Change the spelling
per cent
extremely
dissatisfied, Add a missing verb
were extremely
while
a third proportion of visitors
were satisfied and a small minority of visitors
very satisfied.
After redevelopment, the number of tourists rose significantly with just the number nearly 92,000. Around three-quarter of the majority of guests were satisfied with the museum
whereas
the satisfied and very satisfied proportion was 40% and 35%, respectively. The dissatisfied
ratio decreased by 30%.Replace the word
dissatisfaction
Lastly
, around 5% of visitors
were not sure about their stand.Submitted by kattir2411 on
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