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Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would be benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole.Do you agree or disagree?

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People
 hold different views on whether advertising is successful to encourage customers to buy their
products
 or not. As far as I am concerned, I think that the marketing is successful in persuading more
buyers
 to buy their
items
. In my essay, I will discuss both views and give my own opinion. On the one hand, marketing is still achieved when they can make
people
 want to buy the
products
 which they have seen in their
advertisements
.
Additionally
, the
items
 which are unique can attract
buyers
 to try and buy them.
For example
, with the development of the internet, more and more
advertisements
 can be seen now,
therefore
 the
buyers
 can easy to see the new
items
 and encourage them to buy them.
On the other hand
, the increase in the number of
advertisements
 can cause annoyance to
buyers
. The reason for
this
 is that when
people
 are seeing these
advertisements
 many times, they can be irritated and ignore them.
For instance
, on the internet nowadays there are many websites adding ads to market their
products
,
therefore
 when
people
 need to see the content on those websites they will need to close it.
As a result
, they can be annoyed and ignore these commercials. To my way of thinking, marketing is successful in encouraging
people
 to buy their
items
 when with the spread of commercials, many
people
 can find the
products
 that they are needed through
advertisements
 and persuading them to buy them. In conclusion,
while
 many individuals argue that advertising is common now, It is evident that marketing is making much success in encouraging
people
 to buy their
items
.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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