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Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would be benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole.Do you agree or disagree?

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People
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 hold different views on whether advertising is successful to encourage customers to buy their
products
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 or not. As far as I am concerned, I think that the marketing is successful in persuading more
buyers
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 to buy their
items
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. In my essay, I will discuss both views and give my own opinion. On the one hand, marketing is still achieved when they can make
people
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 want to buy the
products
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 which they have seen in their
advertisements
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.
Additionally
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, the
items
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 which are unique can attract
buyers
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 to try and buy them.
For example
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, with the development of the internet, more and more
advertisements
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 can be seen now,
therefore
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 the
buyers
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 can easy to see the new
items
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 and encourage them to buy them.
On the other hand
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, the increase in the number of
advertisements
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 can cause annoyance to
buyers
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. The reason for
this
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 is that when
people
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 are seeing these
advertisements
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 many times, they can be irritated and ignore them.
For instance
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, on the internet nowadays there are many websites adding ads to market their
products
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,
therefore
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 when
people
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 need to see the content on those websites they will need to close it.
As a result
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, they can be annoyed and ignore these commercials. To my way of thinking, marketing is successful in encouraging
people
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 to buy their
items
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 when with the spread of commercials, many
people
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 can find the
products
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 that they are needed through
advertisements
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 and persuading them to buy them. In conclusion,
while
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 many individuals argue that advertising is common now, It is evident that marketing is making much success in encouraging
people
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 to buy their
items
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.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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