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Some people agree with spending lots of money on a large wedding, while others think it is a waste of money. What is your opinion ?

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A wedding is an important milestone in an Individual’s life.
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, it is argued about the amount of funds allocated in a wedding. Some people prefer spending large amounts of
money
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 in their wedding,
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 some oppose, and are in the view that it is a waste of funds.
This
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 essay will outline the two views followed by my opinion. On the one hand, Elite individuals in a society spend a lot of
money
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 on their wedding, because of the popularity and media publicity. It is one way to express and elevate their social status in society. In certain circumstances, they borrow
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 and conduct a grand wedding, but trapping themselves in a huge debt for a longer period.
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, certain people spend a substantial amount of cash, in order to align with their traditional customs. For an example:- I went to my friend’s wedding, and exchanged few words. He mentioned to me that he had spent INR 3 Crore in his wedding, as he had to maintain social status, because he was a well known public figure.
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, there is a part of the community, that thinks spending too much wealth in a wedding is a waste. They are more concerned with reducing the costs and investing the savings, so that attractive monetary returns can be expected in future. They believe that
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 should be spent with the basic necessities in a wedding,
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 as religious ceremony activities, the rings etc., and not much on the wedding party or at an expensive location. For an instance:- I went to my cousin’s wedding, she had planned her entire wedding with a reasonable budget. She has reduced the food variety offered to the guest, which helped her to reduce the cost substantially,
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 reduce the food wastage. In my opinion, a wedding is an important activity in a couple’s life journey, but the amount spent should be in a reasonable budget, and spending too much will be a waste. The size of the budget depends on your affordability, and should be made from your accessible resources. It should not be made from borrowing funds from a third party.
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