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The health benefits of physical exercises are well known. Despite this, many people do not exercise regularly. What are the reasons for this? What could be done to encourage them to exercise regularly?

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Exercise
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 is very vital for humans to stay healthy and fit. Despite the fact that physical activity is beneficial, a large number of people do not add
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to their hectic schedule. In
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 and try to draw some solutions.
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exercise
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 is their busy life. In the era of inflation, everyone
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 to give more hours to their work to earn more money.
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, they are left with less energy to step
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gyms
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. To tackle
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 problem,
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 should encourage employers to
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gyms
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 at workplaces and make
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 a
cruical
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crucial
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 part of work for their employees.
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electronic gadgets are keeping away people from exercising. After a long day at work,
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tired souls prefer to watch television and use smartphones
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 of going to
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 places. The solution
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this
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 problem is to advertise
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the
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 importance of
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type
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 of platforms
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humans are using nowadays
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 as television and social media. Another cause associated with
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 is a lack of knowledge related to health among
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. Keeping
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aware
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about
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 health through seminars is a solution
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this
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 problem.
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, a famous
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 coach Guru
mann
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 motivates
large
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a large
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 number of youngsters to go to
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through his seminars.
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, there are enormous reasons which are keeping people away from
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 clubs
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 as hectic schedules, screens and less knowledge which can be overcome by building
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 at workplaces and spreading awareness related to
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.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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