Some people believe it is important to spend a lot on family celebration, while others think it is a waste of money. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

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A highly controversial issue today relates to whether to celebrate

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birthdays and weddings or not.

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essay will discuss both debates and explain why I believe the

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to celebrate are stronger. On the one hand, those who support family celebrations cite the various benefits

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that

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events can bring to

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household. These

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from getting to know some extended members of the family, to savouring the moment to enjoying the unique moment and understanding cultural norms regarding traditional weddings.

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, the

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time I attended my

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wedding in Lagos Nigeria, I got to know that it's against our tradition to come empty-handed to a wedding.

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parties are special moments in a person's life which will be remembered for their whole life.

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, others believe that

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is a way to burn money. It is often argued that it cost a lot and

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not compensate for the work. Some people even go to the extent of borrowing a huge amount of money from banks to organize

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events, which is not always reasonable as the money could have yielded more profits if it's invested in stocks and bonds. A second opinion is that

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value could be spent in different ways

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as organizing trips for

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couples and buying clothes for the birthday celebrant. In conclusion, I believe both arguments have their merits.

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, I feel that spending lavishly on weddings and birthdays

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justified as

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events will be a fraction of time that will never be forgotten for some individuals.

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Some people believe it is important to spend a lot on family celebration, while others think it is a waste of money. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced from all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Many countries have compulsory military service for men after they leave school. I would be a good idea for all countries to adopt this system for men and possibly women.

Supermarkets shoul only sell food produced within their own country. What are your opinions about it.

Write a letter to your friend from a different country. Invite him/her to a party at your home and include the following: what the party is about give directions on how to get to your place suggest how to accommodate him/her Start with Dear

Film stars and celebrities often share their views on public matters that have little to do with their profession. Is this a positive or negative development?