Some people believe it is important to spend a lot on family celebration, while others think it is a waste of money. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

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A highly controversial issue today relates to whether to celebrate

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birthdays and weddings or not.

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essay will discuss both debates and explain why I believe the

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arguments

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to celebrate are stronger. On the one hand, those who support family celebrations cite the various benefits

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that

such

events can bring to

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household. These

ranges

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range

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from getting to know some extended members of the family, to savouring the moment to enjoying the unique moment and understanding cultural norms regarding traditional weddings.

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, the

last

time I attended my

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wedding in Lagos Nigeria, I got to know that it's against our tradition to come empty-handed to a wedding.

In addition

such

parties are special moments in a person's life which will be remembered for their whole life.

On the contrary

, others believe that

this

is a way to burn money. It is often argued that it cost a lot and

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not compensate for the work. Some people even go to the extent of borrowing a huge amount of money from banks to organize

such

events, which is not always reasonable as the money could have yielded more profits if it's invested in stocks and bonds. A second opinion is that

this

value could be spent in different ways

such

as organizing trips for

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couples and buying clothes for the birthday celebrant. In conclusion, I believe both arguments have their merits.

However

, I feel that spending lavishly on weddings and birthdays

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justified as

such

events will be a fraction of time that will never be forgotten for some individuals.

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