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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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The issue of whether it is good to have more
people
 at a young
age
 than at old
age
 in a country has long been controversial.
Although
 there are advantages to having more young adults in
society
, I believe that the drawbacks outweighed the benefits in terms of different circumstances. On one hand, having a relatively large number of younger is beneficial to
society
, and adolescents have an impact on contributing the economic development. As youngers are more energetic than the elderly.
For example
, when they work,
people
 at younger ages have relatively more productive power because of their high physical strength, which in turn results in making better profits for a company.
Moreover
, Since the chance of suffering from illness among the elderly is higher than that of adolescents, ranging from physical pain, and eyes problem to cardiovascular disease
due to
 degeneration, public funds may have to focus on the healthcare industry
instead
 of other elements, like education.
Therefore
, a large number of the elderly may impose a large-scale medical burden on
society
.
On the other hand
, other than the aforementioned advantages, there are some disadvantages caused by the high population density of the youth.
It is clear that
people
 at a young
age
 do not have a well-developed mind, they may easily commit crimes
due to
 peer influence. Whatever their friends ask them to do, they would try to commit no matter if the behaviour is legal or not. Another point worth our attention is that some service industries, like construction, may face challenges
such
 as the insufficiency of experienced workers, which normally are in old
age
. Since those practical skills and techniques are gained through experiences of daily assignments, adolescents may not acquire the skills and may not get the job done easily, in an environment that mostly consists of young
people
, without professional guidance from the elderly.
To conclude
, I believe that the disadvantages of
this
 situation outweighed the advantages, because the experiences come from the elderly does beneficial to our
society
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • innovation
  • skilled labor
  • social development
  • technology
  • dividend
  • competition
  • resources
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