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Some universities offer online courses as an alternaive to classes delivered on campus. Do you think this is a ppositive or negative development?

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Education
 is a key to success and a right that should be
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entitled
 to everyone. Recently, some universities have
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 online courses
instead
 of face-to-face lectures. Personally, I believe that
this
 is a
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positive
 innovation in
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 system. On the one hand, there is no denying that
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direct
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lectures
 on campus
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 the most common form of
education
, which has certain advantages. First and foremost, it provides
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 academic atmosphere that fosters a sense of discipline among students.
Secondly
, their academic performance is likely to improve with
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constant interaction with their lecturers.
Lastly
, they can possibly enhance their social relationship by communicating with their peers.
However
,
such
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 of
education
 is not always available for everyone, which is the reason that lies behind the creation of online courses.
On the other hand
,
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 learning offers everyone
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equal access
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education
. Not only people in urban areas but
also
 full-time employees and residents in remote places can experience the up-to-standard academic environment.
Additionally
, they are possibly able to
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receive
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 cost-effective mode of learning, because without hiring or purchasing the educational facilities, the price might be fairly reasonable.
Similarly
, online
education
 gives students more control over their schedule, which
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facilitate
facilitates
 the balance between study and recreation activities. It should
also
 be noted that with the flexible timetables, they definitely have more time to gain
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real-life experience,
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 full-time or part-time. In
this
 sense, there is every likelihood that they will be full-equipped with the essential skills for their future career by the time of graduation,
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consequently
, have a good start on their career path. In conclusion, online
education
 offered by many universities will certainly make a great contribution to
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glabal
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global
education
.
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