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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A person should never make an important decision alone. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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, most
people
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 make important
decisions
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 in their lives to change or to affect their future. These
decisions
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 might be about high school, university, job selections, etc. Some
people
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 indicate that a
person
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 should discuss the
decision
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 they make with others;
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, others claim that
people
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 should decide for themselves with their own personal ideas. As far as I am concerned, a
person
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 should consult with other
people
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 for their plans and debate with them.
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 with, discussing with other
people
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 provides a
person
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 with a chance to brainstorm
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various ideas.
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 of following a restricted opinion, considering other options and looking from a different point of view might be beneficial
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. Sometimes, an idea that seems plausible to apply might be disadvantageous in reality.
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, asking and gaining information would be more effective since a
person
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 would be fully informed about the
decision
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 he or she is going to make. Discussing with other
people
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 minimizes the possible risks of making a wrong
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.
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, asking for other
people
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 assures a
person
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different
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of different
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 perspectives.
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as mentioned earlier, debating with other
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 decreases the possibility of risks in a
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. It thwarts
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future issues if the made
decision
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 is wrong.
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, provided that s student makes a wrong
decision
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 about the university selection, they will be demotivated in their college, which in turn would impact their academic performance and job selection. In order to avoid
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 problem chain, discussion can take place. Wrong
decisions
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 can turn into severe problems in the future, which would obviously harm someone mentally and physically.
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, talking with
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for
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decisions
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 prohibits negative consequences.
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, discussing with other
people
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 in order to find the best option exhibits some benefits.
First,
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it provides brainstorming for a
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.
Second,
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it
also
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 helps avoid negative consequences. In my opinion, an important
decision
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 shouldn’t be made alone.
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Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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