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The charts illustrate the number of people who were affected by 4 types of noise pollution in day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007.

The charts illustrate the number of people who were affected by 4 types of noise pollution in day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007.
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The bar chart shows the different 4 types of
pollution
 in the year 2007 in
cities
 and rural
areas
 that are badly affecting the
people
 throughout the day. The population was high in
cities
 compared to the
village
. Almost 75
million
people
 reside in
cities
 and 40
million
 in
village
areas
. the main highlight is there is no industry
pollution
 in
village
areas
.
To begin
 with, Vehicles are more in
cities
. So in the graph, near to 60
million
people
 suffer traffic
pollution
 in
cities
 and in villages 35
million
people
 from an
overall
 population of 40
million
.
Secondly
, train
pollution
,
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 is almost the same when compared with the population in villages and
cities
. 10
million
people
 affecting
this
 noise
pollution
 in both
areas
.
Thirdly
, Aircraft
pollution
 is less in both
areas
. Near to 3
million
people
 tolerate the noise coming from aircraft.
Last
 but not least, There is no Industrial
pollution
 in the
village
.
while
 in
cities
 only 1
million
people
 suffer.
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