People argue that team sports should be a part of the school time able for children rather than individual sports such as swimming or running. Do you agree or disagree?
Sports
activity
is a must activity
in schools. This
is one
of the activity
that helps Change to a plural noun
activities
students
to gain physical and mental strength. Thus
, this
helps them to get more benefits in later times such
as,
graduation, jobs and so on.
Remove the comma
apply
Sports
activity
is categorised as two, one
is individual sports
and other
Correct article usage
the other
one
is team
sports
. Individual sports
such
as athletics(i.e. swimming, running, longjump
, etc,.) and Correct your spelling
long jump
Team
sports
such
as football, cricket, hockey , etc,.
Change the punctuation
,
.
Both
of these sports
activities are great in
their own Change preposition
from
prespectivies
. Now Correct your spelling
perspectives
perspective
lets
discuss Replace the word
let's
let us
about
which Remove the preposition
apply
one
is to be included in school
time or not .
All we do in school
is studies
and Fix the agreement mistake
study
to
get good or best marks or grades in exams. Fix the infinitive
apply
Thus
, they introduced sports
in school
activities list, which should be included in Correct article usage
the school
one
of the periods. There should be atleast
Correct your spelling
at least
one
or two periods a week in school
schedules. This
helps the students
to get free from their stressful minds. So, that they can later study better. Well lets
move on to categories of Replace the word
let's
let us
sports
, whether
which is best for Correct word choice
and
students
. Individuals
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Individual
sports
can showcase the talents
of a
individual student Change the article
an
whereas
team
sports
will show as
the Change preposition
apply
team
talents
of the students
. Both
are good in their prespectives
. Each Correct your spelling
perspectives
one
as
their unique Correct your spelling
has
talents
in sports
aspects.
Students
can always be invlove
in Correct your spelling
involved
involve
both
sports
,
so that they can showcase what Remove the comma
apply
their
are betterCorrect pronoun usage
they
.
When they are in Change preposition
at.
individuals
Change the noun form
individual
sports
such
as,
running, swimming, Remove the comma
apply
longjump
. They can show their individual strength and Correct your spelling
long jump
talents
. Whereas
in team
sports
they can be one
in team
to know Add an article
the team
a team
everyone
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everyone's
strength
. so, they can be Fix the agreement mistake
strengths
one
in as team
members to win the game which they can help to know about each other by strengthing their team
as friends. This
way they can win any game.
As my
conclusion, Change preposition
My
that
these Add a missing verb
is that
both
sports
is
best for the Correct subject-verb agreement
are
students
in school
to know their talents
. So, schools must include both
the
Correct article usage
apply
sports
so that the students
can better understand their knowledge to
these Change preposition
of
sports
that
leads to their future growth.Correct pronoun usage
which
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