You have recently learned about a piece of equipment that would help you at your workplace. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, describe the equipment explain how it might be useful at your workplace offer help in purchasing it Write at least 150 words.

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Dear Dhruvi, I trust you are doing well. I am writing
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to propose a very useful piece of equipment which could
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expand our engineering capabilities and productivity. First and foremost, I would like to suggest Apple’s Vision Pro
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all our Designers. It is a VR headset
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equipped with the latest
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, sensors, and other
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hardware
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,
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will allow us as designers to work in real
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environment to design any new product without having the need
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physical
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product.
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, Its powerful GPU and CPU will enable us to run more simulations, and CFDs more than four times faster than our computers.
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, I would highly recommend that the company should invest in
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new technology.
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but not least, I have a friend who is working in Apple’s corporate office,
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could help us to get the best price. I am excited to hear a positive response from you about
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proposal. Kind regards, Ruchin Patel

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coherence and cohesion
Consider breaking up some of the longer sentences into shorter ones for improved clarity.
task achievement
Make sure to provide more detailed examples of how the equipment could practically enhance productivity.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear greeting and closing, which contributes to a friendly tone.
task achievement
You proposed a specific piece of equipment and highlighted its benefits well, which is important for task achievement.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • state-of-the-art
  • ergonomic
  • cost-effective
  • streamline processes
  • boost productivity
  • enhance efficiency
  • high-quality
  • integrate into our workflow
  • ROI (return on investment)
  • implement
  • facilitate
  • procurement
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