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The diagram shows how bees produce honey

The diagram shows how bees produce honey
The given diagram depicts how
honey
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 is produced by a school of bees. In general, there are three main steps in making
honey
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 namely hunting the pure part of
flowers
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, processing of
honey
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, and resulting
honey
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.
Firstly
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, a school of bees try to find plants having
the
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good quality
flowers
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. After getting the
flowers
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, they take and own the nectar of
flowers
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 and
then
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 bring it to their cells made of a part of the wood. In
this
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 step, the bees put the nectar longitudinally and they air the completed cells continuously in order to make the nectar a bit melt.
Next,
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the cells which already aired in some days, undergo water evaporation for some days which is the essential process of
honey
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 in getting a good quality of
honey
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words honey, flowers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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