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Advertisements influence us in a negative way. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#advertisements #influence
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Nowadays,
advertisements
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 have negative impacts on our lives. I will completely agree with
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 statement.
Firstly
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,
advertisements
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 force
people
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 to buy things which are not needed for them at all and
secondly
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, these types of promotion methods can give false
information
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 about some
products
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 or even companies. On the one hand, the promotion of some
products
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 has forced to
people
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 buy unnecessary things which are not really needed for them.
However
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, some groups of society always trying to show their own new
products
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 to other
people
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, because they think that they look like cool
people
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 by buying newly released staff.
In addition
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,
people
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 give tons of money for obtaining the
products
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 which were shown in
advertisements
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 can bring some serious problems
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 as poverty.
For example
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,
according to
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 the article
of
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in
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 The Times Square in 2019, most of
the
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society
are
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is
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 likely to purchase unnecessary
products
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instead
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 of buying necessary ones via seeing
such
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 related
advertisements
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.
On the other hand
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, one of the other impacts of
advertisements
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 is delivering completely or partly false
information
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 about some
products
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 to the population. Advertisement
boards
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 have been seen in all supermarkets, malls, or even next to the main roads which attract the interest of the whole
people
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 who are passing by them.
Moreover
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, all the
information
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 which was shown on
advertisements
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boards
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 is not true at all, because they want to attract more
people
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 to their own
products
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. In
this
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 case, there is not enough time for
people
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 to check the advertisement's
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 whether true or not.
For instance
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,
according to
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 the result of a survey among the population of Canada in 2020,
although
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people
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 know that the
information
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 on the
boards
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 is not the same as reality, they are likely to purchase the promoted things. To summarize, in my opinion,
advertisements
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 affect
people
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 in a negative way
due
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to
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by
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 forcing them to buy their own
products
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 even if they are not needed at all for them and give false
information
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 to society through advertisement
boards
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 in order to increase the sale rate.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumerism
  • Influence
  • Manipulative
  • Materialistic
  • Idealized imagery
  • Impulse buying
  • Overconsumption
  • Target demographics
  • Advertising campaigns
  • Societal norms
  • Data mining
  • Decision fatigue
  • Psychological impact
  • False needs
  • Brand loyalty
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