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Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history.

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 is considered by many one of the most crucial academic subjects, others believe that nowadays
Technology
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 and
Science
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 have taken the place of
History
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 in
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 of importance. In my point of view, I firmly believe that today's developments in
science
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 and
technology
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 owe their advancements to
history
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,
therefore
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this
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 subject should maintain its importance in the academic curriculum. It is believed by many that given the recent technological and scientific advancements, subjects related to these two matters should be valued the most by schools and universities. They may argue that since
history
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 belongs to the past, it should not be considered and studied by modern generations. To illustrate, in 2010, the University of Michigan made a decision based on a survey conducted on some of their pupils to suspend
history
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 subjects for a specified duration on a trial basis.
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, soon
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this
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 unanimous decision, repercussions began to emerge, and remarkable academic failures were being reported by professors, complaining about their pupil's lack of knowledge in
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. I personally
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 argue that we should consider the fact that the modern world's inventions and discoveries in
science
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 and
technology
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 have an integral relationship with
history
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. In simpler
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, human beings’ innovations in
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 of making a discovery or inventing a device will not be achievable, unless a precise analysis is done on previous models or theories, made by pioneers.
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,
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 the invention of today's planes is accredited by the Wright brothers, they were inspired by Da Vinci's drawings illustrated in their
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 books. In conclusion,
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 it is thought by many that
History
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 should be replaced by
Science
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 and
Technology
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, in
terms
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 of importance in academic curricula, I strongly assert that
History
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 has an integral connection with today’s developments, and disregarding it might bring about long-term repercussions.

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task achievement
In order to improve on task response, ensure that a balance is struck between discussing both views provided in the prompt. While your essay predominantly argues in favor of history's importance, incorporating more discussion about the significance of science and technology would lead to a more well-rounded response.
coherence cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, consider varying your connectors and transitions to facilitate a smoother flow of ideas. Introduce counter-arguments and contrast them with your opinion to enhance the logical progression of your argument.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural heritage
  • Historical perspective
  • Analytical skills
  • Contextual understanding
  • Technological advancements
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • Innovation
  • Interdisciplinary
  • Job market
  • Climate crisis
  • Cultural identity
  • Critical thinking
  • Humanities
  • Contemporary issues
  • Integration
  • Tech-savvy
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