The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main feat make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now.

summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main feat make comparisons where relevant.
The presented maps above illustrate the location of
books
by
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a number of different genres, specifically in a bookstore, in the period of time from 2000 to these days respectively.
To begin
with, It is evident that directly near the entrance still can be seen travel
books
, new
books
and a service desk respectively. Notwithstanding, It is essential to emphasise that
the
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fiction
books
were replaced by other
books
,
such
as art, hobbies, cookery and fiction genre.
Furthermore
, It is significant to add that in 2000 these genres of
books
were placed in the middle of a bookstore,
while
nowadays It can be seen that these genres were replaced by the cafe with three tables. Even though there are already a number of different changes, It is substantial to emphasise that fiction
books
was
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relocated,
hence
the number of
books
have
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decreased,
however
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these days non-fiction
books
can be found in that place.
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