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The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main feat make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main feat make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented maps above illustrate the location of
books
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 a number of different genres, specifically in a bookstore, in the period of time from 2000 to these days respectively.
To begin
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 with, It is evident that directly near the entrance still can be seen travel
books
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, new
books
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 and a service desk respectively. Notwithstanding, It is essential to emphasise that
the
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fiction
books
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 were replaced by other
books
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,
such
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 as art, hobbies, cookery and fiction genre.
Furthermore
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, It is significant to add that in 2000 these genres of
books
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 were placed in the middle of a bookstore,
while
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 nowadays It can be seen that these genres were replaced by the cafe with three tables. Even though there are already a number of different changes, It is substantial to emphasise that fiction
books
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was
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 relocated,
hence
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 the number of
books
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have
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 decreased,
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however
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 these days non-fiction
books
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 can be found in that place.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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