You are studying for a qualification, and you would like some off work to complete it. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: - ask for some time off to complete a qualification. - Suggest what you will do later at work if you have time off. - Say how the qualification helps your job or company.
Dear,
Dr.
Jignesh Vala
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letter to apply for a one week leave from 1st to 7th September. I am Dr. Ravi Patel veterinary surgeon at your surgery department. I would like to share the reason behind taking leave.
Currently, I am preparing for cataract surgery in small animals and I would like to improve my knowledge and practical skills. Fortunately, I was acknowledged by my friend regarding hands-on training in cataract surgery by well-known surgeons from Canada, Organised by a a
worldwide veterinary service. Remove the redundancy
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Thus
, I request you for one week's leave.
Furthermore
, I asked my colleague to oversee my work when I went for training. I will follow-up
on my clinical cases during my free time in the training.
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follow up
However
, Nowadays we get a high number of cataract cases compared to the available ophthalmic surgeons. Thus
, This
will help our organisation for better outcomes and reputation in our city.
I eagerly waited for your positive response.
Yours sincerely
Dr. Ravi PatelSubmitted by dr.ravibgondaliya786 on
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language
The letter contains minor grammatical errors and occasional awkward phrasing. Review for punctuation and ensure the flow is smooth. For instance: 'Fortunately, I was acknowledged by my friend...' could be 'Fortunately, a friend informed me...' or 'I was informed by a friend...'.
coherence
The last paragraph could be revised slightly to avoid repetitiveness: 'Thus, This will...' could be 'Thus, this will...'.
task achievement
The letter effectively addresses all parts of the task, providing clear reasons for the leave, planning for work coverage, and highlighting the benefits of the qualification.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is professional and polite, which is suitable for this type of request.
logical structure
Each paragraph maintains a clear focus which contributes to the overall coherence and readability of the letter.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite