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Children can learn from movies, books and the Internet than real-life experience. Do you agree?

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It is undeniable that youngsters can learn more about
life
 using different types of ludic materials namely movies or books. I partially agree with
such
 a point of view, because even though
this
 type of educational material allows a great source of knowledge,
children
 who are exposed to real experiences may
also
 be prepared to deal with
life
 challenges. On the one hand, nowadays books or movies are designed to provide a wide explanation of basic
life
 situations
,
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 because
children
 have become more curious over the years about
such
 questions.
For example
, It is estimated that 4 out of 10 Brazilian offspring relate more effectively to understanding financial challenges through modern Mathematical books offered at school, which may raise awareness about effective ways to deal with economic issues in adult
life
.
On the other hand
, learning through an unexpected situation may help to raise
children
's knowledge about required choices, as
this
 contact allows
children
 to think deeply about a more effective way to deal with
such
 problems.
For instance
, it is known that for
children
 who spend their finances on expensive products
such
 as games, and toys without previous planning may probably try to ask any type of discount at the next opportunity once they have the chance to do so.
To conclude
, even though ludic material may be an effective choice for Scion to learn about
life
 experience, learning through real experiences
also
 raise
children
's knowledge.
However
,
this
 type of choice needs to be made by each parent, as they know how to succeed whit their offspring's expectations.
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