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Some people believe that developments in the field of artificial intelligence will have a positive impact on our lives in the near future. Others, by contrast, are worried that we are not prepared for a world in which computers are more intelligent than humans. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

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People seem to be either excited or concerned about the future impact of artificial
intelligence
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 on their daily life. Personally, I understand both opposing feelings. I am fascinated by the developments of artificial
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 and apprehensive about its possible negative effects. On the one hand, advances in artificial
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 have some obvious benefits.
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,
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 technology does better than
humans
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 in these jobs that need a precious and big amount of calculation.
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, robots can operate surgical procedures better than human doctors and we already have cars that use sensors and cameras to drive themselves.
Such
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 technologies help to reduce the likelihood of human errors. It is easy to imagine how these technologies will steadily improve human well-being.
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, I share the concern of people who believe that artificial
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 may harm us if we are not careful. In the short term, we will see a rise in unemployment as machines or software programs can replace
humans
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 in several jobs.
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, self-drive car technology can cause redundancies in driving jobs
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 as taxi drivers, bus drivers, or lorry drivers. In the medium term, being replaced by robots may cause
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 deskilled and lose the sense of purpose in life. In the long term, there is a fear that robots can make decisions without human supervision and without regard for the well-being of
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. In conclusion, artificial
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 may bring undoubted benefits to our life but it may cause the potential risks that we have to predict.
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