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The chart below shows the result of survey of patient who stayed in three different wards of a hospitals. It shows what percentage of the patients replied "very good" aout various aspects of their hospital ecperience.

The chart below shows the result of survey of patient who stayed in three different wards of a hospitals. It shows what percentage of the patients replied "very good" aout various aspects of their hospital ecperience.
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The bar graph gives information on the patient’s reviews of three different hospitals’
wards
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.
Overall
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, It is noticeable that Holly Wood had the best reviews in all
four
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 categories (Hospital staff, Waiting
time
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,
Quality
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 of treatment, and
Quality
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 of aftercare) .
Additionally
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, there is a gap between Holly and the other
wards
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: Maple
Ward
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, and Oak
Ward
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. In terms of three
wards
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, Holly
Ward
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 gets from 75 to 90 “very good” responses in
four
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 sections, which is the best review compared to the other two
wards
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 in all
four
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 sections. Following Holly
Ward
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, Oak
Ward
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 comes in second for good reviews except for Waiting
Time
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.
Although
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 there is a reverse in Waiting
time
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, Maple
Ward
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 was considered the most unsatisfied
ward
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 from their patient’ experience. From the view of the
four
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 categories,
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Quality
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 of treatment is rated good for all
wards
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. Hospital staff and
Quality
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 of aftercare have a similar tendency between the three
wards
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; Holly
Ward
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 gets the highest review, Oak
Ward
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 follows, and Maple
Ward
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 has the lowest evaluation.Interestingly, Waiting
time
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 seems to be the most challenging category for
Wards
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 to get good feedback from their patients.
To sum up
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, depending on their patients, Holly
Ward
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 gives the most satisfied services based on
four
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 categories.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wards, four, time, quality, ward with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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