The chart below shows the result of survey of patient who stayed in three different wards of a hospitals. It shows what percentage of the patients replied "very good" aout various aspects of their hospital ecperience.

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The bar graph gives information on the patient’s reviews of three different hospitals’

wards

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, It is noticeable that Holly Wood had the best reviews in all

four

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categories (Hospital staff, Waiting

time

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Quality

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of treatment, and

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of aftercare) .

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, there is a gap between Holly and the other

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: Maple

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, and Oak

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. In terms of three

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, Holly

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gets from 75 to 90 “very good” responses in

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sections, which is the best review compared to the other two

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in all

four

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sections. Following Holly

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, Oak

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comes in second for good reviews except for Waiting

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there is a reverse in Waiting

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, Maple

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was considered the most unsatisfied

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from their patient’ experience. From the view of the

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categories,

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Quality

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of treatment is rated good for all

wards

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. Hospital staff and

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of aftercare have a similar tendency between the three

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; Holly

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gets the highest review, Oak

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follows, and Maple

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has the lowest evaluation.Interestingly, Waiting

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seems to be the most challenging category for

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to get good feedback from their patients.

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, depending on their patients, Holly

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gives the most satisfied services based on

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categories.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words wards, four, time, quality, ward with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

206 words

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The chart below shows the result of survey of patient who stayed in three different wards of a hospitals. It shows what percentage of the patients replied "very good" aout various aspects of their hospital ecperience.

Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender?

Some people think that cultural traditions will be destroyed when they are used as money-making machines aimed at tourists, other people believes that it is the only way to save such traditions in the world today. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion

In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

The length of vacation that employees enjoy each year varies from job to job. Do you think people should have the same number of holidays regardless of their occupation? Explain your answer.