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Some People Believe That Professionals Such As Doctors And Engineers Should Be Required To Work In The Country Where They Did Their Training.

#people #professionals #doctors #engineers #work #country
Many
people
 think that professionals must
work
 for the
place
 where they
trained
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 ,
while
 some others think that it should be free for them to choose their own working
place
. Requiring
people
 to
work
 in the
country
 where they did their training could provide a lot of benefits for that
country
, but it is personally better for professionals if they can choose the
place
 they feel comfortable
to
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working
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work
 at.
Firstly
, when
people
work
 in a
country
 where they have already spent a long time, it will be easier and faster for them to gain more knowledge and deal with problems. They will have more abilities to adapt to the working environment in that
country
.
Secondly
, more
people
 working at the
place
 where they came from could provide that
country
 with the labour in need.
On the other hand
, professionals may have more job opportunities if they can develop in the
country
 that they wish. Explaining
this
, industry development depends on countries. So if
people
 can
work
 in a
country
that is
 suitable for their talent, it would be a huge chance for them to develop themselves and
also
 be a chance for the
country
 to create a jump in those industries.
For example
,
a
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fashion lovers can learn more when they have an opportunity to
work
 in France or Italy, where fashion has already become a sign of that
country
. In conclusion, it is a good thing that
people
 put effort into the host
country
’s industry. But in my opinion, it would be more beneficial in personal and the world’s industries
while
 letting
people
 recognise where they belong to.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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