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Some People Believe That Professionals Such As Doctors And Engineers Should Be Required To Work In The Country Where They Did Their Training.

#people #professionals #doctors #engineers #work #country
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Many
people
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 think that professionals must
work
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 for the
place
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 where they
trained
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 some others think that it should be free for them to choose their own working
place
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. Requiring
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 to
work
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 in the
country
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 where they did their training could provide a lot of benefits for that
country
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, but it is personally better for professionals if they can choose the
place
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 they feel comfortable
to
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work
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 at.
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, when
people
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work
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 in a
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 where they have already spent a long time, it will be easier and faster for them to gain more knowledge and deal with problems. They will have more abilities to adapt to the working environment in that
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.
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, more
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 working at the
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 where they came from could provide that
country
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 with the labour in need.
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, professionals may have more job opportunities if they can develop in the
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 that they wish. Explaining
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, industry development depends on countries. So if
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 can
work
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 in a
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that is
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 suitable for their talent, it would be a huge chance for them to develop themselves and
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 be a chance for the
country
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 to create a jump in those industries.
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fashion lovers can learn more when they have an opportunity to
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 in France or Italy, where fashion has already become a sign of that
country
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. In conclusion, it is a good thing that
people
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 put effort into the host
country
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’s industry. But in my opinion, it would be more beneficial in personal and the world’s industries
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 letting
people
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 recognise where they belong to.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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