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Everyone should stay in school until the age of eighteen. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#school #age #eighteen
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In many countries,
school
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 attendance is mandatory for all
children
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 up to a specific
age
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. In India,
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 is 14 years of
age
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. In the UK and many other countries, it is 16,
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 the UK government now has plans to raise the
school
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 leaving
age
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 to 18. I agree that
children
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 should be in
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 till the
age
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 of 18. In the following paragraphs, I intend to put forth my arguments to support my views. The most important reason for raising the
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 leaving
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 to 18 is that
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 the
age
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 of 14-18 is the most impressionable
age
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 of a child’s life. During
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 period of adolescence, the
children
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 undergo physical and hormonal changes because of which they are under a lot of pressure.
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, lengthening compulsory schooling helps protect childhood.
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 at
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 students will be protected from some of the pressures in life. They have the rest of adulthood to work, make budgets balance and make choices. Providing them with space to grow for as long as possible can make them better prepared for adult life.
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, more
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 provides the opportunity to acquire more skills and
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 more options. It has been shown many times that those with more
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 find it easier to find work and that they are more likely to find that work satisfying. What is more, raising the
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-leaving
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 is a crucial investment in society's future. Doing so increases the economic potential of the future workforce, and so will bring increased tax revenues in the long term.
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, the opponents claim that extending the period of compulsory
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 requires a huge investment in teachers, books and new
school
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 buildings which would be very expensive. They
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 say that many families need their
children
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 to make an economic contribution to the family income and working early can help these families to survive.
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, just being in
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 does not guarantee that a student is learning. Unwilling students become disruptive and damage the
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 of others in their class. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that, as every garden has weeds,
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 compulsory schooling
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 has some drawbacks.
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, these drawbacks are nothing compared to the vast benefits
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 approach would bring and the cost needed to implement would be negligible if compared to the huge economic potential of the future workforce.
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, I believe that everyone should stay in
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 until the
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 of eighteen.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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