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Many historic buildings are being distroyed or damaged. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to preserve the buildings?

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History is an integral part of human evolution, and we the new generation learn about history through historic
buildings
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, folk songs, written documents and so on. Folk songs and written documents are easier to store and inherit
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 the next generation than historic
buildings
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 which are being
distroyed
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destroyed
 either by nature or humans. In
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 essay, I will discuss some reasons for
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 and give some ideas about what should be done to preserve the building. There are two main factors contributing to the degradation of these
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. The first one is no preservation done by the owners. There is no doubt that historic
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 are usually located in the very
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 of big cities which are the most crowded and most expensive
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. One historic building,
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, may be shared
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 households during the 1970s in Hanoi. Over time, the number of
popullation
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population
 households grows is getting larger, and the building is divided into smaller units to accommodate their personal lives.
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, it is hard to refurbish them if an agreement is not achievable among the residents.
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,
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 its good location, state-owned historic
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 are destroyed for modern building construction in order to make a
good looking
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 city infrastructure.
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, in Hanoi, the Hoalo prison was destroyed partly to convert it into a five-star hotel. So what should be done to preserve these
buildings
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? In my opinion, it is better to get support from the government to move crowded residents to the outskirts of the city with some fundamental financial support
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 and
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 to utilize some public funds to refurbish the historical
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 for tourism purposes. Once it is done, the government can earn money from tourists and reinvest in building
maintanence
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maintenance
. In conclusion, the historic
buildings
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 are very important to the culture of a country.
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 the need for
goverment
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government
 support is a critical part to keep those lasting longer, and
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 next generation will understand our glorious history.

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