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Education should be accessible to people of all economic backgrounds. All leveld of education, from primary school to tertiary education, should be free. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

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In these modern days, some
people
 believe that everyone should have access to schools and universities, regardless of their economic
backgrounds
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background
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. In
this
 essay, I will explain the reasons why I fully agree with the opinion.
Firstly
, free education ensures everyone has the
opportunities
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opportunity
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 to pursue knowledge and career.
Consequently
,
people
 could contribute their knowledge and expertise to
society
.
Moreover
, it could affect economic growth and innovation, leading to a more prosperous
society
overall
.
For instance
, in
Singapore
, education is pretty affordable to the
citizen
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citizens
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.
As a result
, most Singaporeans are really educated and
Singapore
 would be able to be one of the richest countries,
while
 only having a small region and limited natural resources. Now,
Singapore
's highest exports are their expertise to other countries and they have a lot of big companies providing employment to their citizen and others.
Secondly
, free education prevents social stratification. Educated
people
 are more open-minded and develop better judgement towards other
people
.
Therefore
, could foster a sense of equality and provide more safer and more harmonious
society
.
As a consequence
, reducing the hate between others and more civilised
people
.
Thus
, reducing the crime rates. In
Singapore
, even though it consists of multiple ethnic groups and religions,
people
 tend to be more open-minded and respectful.
To conclude
, tuition without charge, provides a lot of benefits, including the opportunities for everyone to excel at something, push the growth of the economy, reduce crime rates, and create a better
society
overall
. Because of those reasons, countries should provide more affordable or even free tuition for their citizen.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessible
  • economic backgrounds
  • tertiary education
  • equal opportunities
  • workforce
  • innovation
  • social cohesion
  • class divide
  • government budgets
  • compromised quality
  • investment
  • future earnings
  • global competition
  • implementation
  • funding
  • administration
  • infrastructure
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