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some people think the best way to improve road safety is by reducing the limits on vehicles, others think there are other better ways.

#people #road #safety #limits #vehicles
Nowadays,
counting
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 of
road
accidents
 is hiking alarmingly.
Therefore
, curbing
the
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highways collisions has become vital to ensure safety on roadways. some people reckon
limting
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limiting
listing
 vehicles counting can helps to
tackles
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road
 clashes,
however
, others opine that creating awareness and widening
roads
wouls
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would
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 be
better
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a better
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 way. I will discuss both views,
despite
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as I reinforce later view. on the one side, limiting
number
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a number
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 of vehicles can be a considerable method to minimize the
highwas
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highway
highways
accidents
. Because if the number will be less on
roads
,
then
poeple
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people
 will get more space to drive on
roads
.
Morever
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Moreover
, reducing motor numbers could help to control environmental pollution
as well as
 noise pollution. On the flip side of
argument
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, highway
accidents
 can be controlled by widening
roads
.
As in
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this
 way,
roads
 will be more spacious.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, strict laws ad hefty fines might give
sofe
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some
 relief from driveway collisions.
Therefore
, authorities should implement some strict
legilations
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legislations
regulations
legislation
. More than
this
,
insallation
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installation
 of
speed
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the speed
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 limit and traffic rule
camers
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cameras
 may
also
 give some
postive
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positive
 results in
road
 collision reduction. As
,
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poeple
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people
 will drive carefully because of cameras.
Therefore
,
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the govement
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govement
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government
 should put on each and every red light
signals
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signal
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.
This
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These
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 actions can help to to catch people
red handed
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red-handed
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 and others will
also
 learn some lesson.
To conclude
,
eventhough
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even though
, minimizing vehicle
limit
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limits
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 can help to lessen
road
accidents
. whilst,
broadning
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broadening
roads
, red
ligth
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light
lights
camers
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cameras
 and
stricts
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strict
 regulations are
better
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a better
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method
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methods
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 to tackle
road
saftey
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safety
 problems.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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