Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

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lot
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of people have difficulties getting enough sleep and I can relate. In our modern world, there are a
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of negative factors that can influence
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our sleeping behaviour.
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my point of view, the first and the main problem is a blue light from our smartphones, laptops, TV screens, iPads, etc. There were a
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of different experiments that showed the negative influence of using devices before getting sleep. The solution is to avoid looking at the screen
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two hours
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you
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to
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bed.
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, try to leave your phone in another room. It will help you not to touch it after every received notification. Mode "Do not disturb" can help you as well. The second reason is an increased level of stress, especially here, in Ukraine.
Unfortunatelly
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, there is no one-click solution
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to deal with all
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circumstances which brave
citizenes
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citizens
of our country have to face. Personally for me, running, birdwatching, reading and looking for
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in
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second-hand shops are the best ways to receive positive emotions which help to get rid of
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level
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of stress. The third reason is some issues with
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only
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can help. Annual basic check-up of your
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is
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sign of
selfcare
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self-care
. Do not ignore
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. The fourth reason is unhealthy food, which includes a
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of
fastfood
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fast food
, sweets, Coca-Cola, etc.
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kind of food ruins our
health
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. So we need to keep in
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mind that we are responsible for our lives and if we want to live
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and happy life we should take care of what we eat.
To sum up
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, I want to mention that good sleep is a basic step to keep your mental and physical
health
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right condition. So please, do not ignore
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above to improve your sleep. Take care and sleep tight!

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Insomnia
  • Sleep deprivation
  • Sleep disorders
  • Sleep quality
  • Fatigue
  • Exhaustion
  • Restless
  • Restorative sleep
  • REM sleep
  • Circadian rhythm
  • Sleep hygiene
  • Napping
  • Sleep duration
  • Melatonin
  • Sleep-inducing
  • Drowsiness
  • Sleep disturbances
  • Obstructive sleep apnea
  • Snoring
  • Sleepwalking
  • Sleep talking
  • Shift work
  • Sleeping pills
  • Sleep aid
  • Relaxation techniques
  • Meditation
  • Deep breathing
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