Prision is the best punishment for criminals. Do you agree or disagree?

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the most effective way of punishing criminals. I don't entirely agree with the statement as there are a range of crimes of different magnitude and all cannot be punished in the same manner.
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, punishing criminals depends on the offence they committed any crime can vary to many degrees.
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it can be agreed that all offences should be punished the punishment cannot be the same for all.
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, a person parking his or her car in a no-parking zone cannot be punished the same way as somebody who robbed a bank.
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, punishments are given to rectify people and help them to become better people.
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, the punishment should be designed to induce a sense of guilt in the offender but if we imprison even for the smallest of violations
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that would create an impression of fear and disbelief in the government and the judicial system.
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, someone who is imprisoned for urination in public wouldn't feel a sense of justice rather it will instil a sense of fear.
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, serial killers may be imprisoned for life and still won't feel guilty about the crime committed by them.
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, Imprisoning all offenders is not fair because of the various degrees of crime and the correct measure of all violations cannot be imprisonment.
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as, a wealthy person can get bail even for the most heinous atrocity, as he can afford the best lawyer and
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, a poor person might have to go to jail for
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simplest of an offence. In conclusion, prisoning is definitely a good way to punish criminals but it cannot be stated as the best measure as the crimes may vary in magnitude.

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